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September 30, 2012
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Haikus are too short,
To be at all worth clicking,
So I'll write some more.

These words are filler,
So I don't feel truly bad,
For writing briefly.

I write re Haikus
In a Haiku, how clever!
I'm showing off now.
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I think this is very well written. The way the haikus themselves are about haikus is ironic and clever. I never would of thought that someone could make a work truly tell about itself in such a way. I've read other work by you and honestly, you have a lot of promise. The only thing I would've changed in this poem is made it say rewrite instead of "re haikus". Other than that I love your work and hope that you will continue to write. If you don't you'll be depriving the World of greatness! Best of luck to you!
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minninnewah Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

This is quite clever! I like the cheeky personality in this poem. The first two are great just how they are but the last has a few things I'd like to point out.

Firstly, I'm pretty sure "re" is just a typo that's supposed to be three, so you can fix that up really quickly :P

Secondly, I'm not hugely fond of it saying that you wrote three Haikus in a Haiku, because although you did write three Haikus and put them together, the overall product is not a Haiku itself, so they are not "in a Haiku" as it says. This bit just throws the reader off a little because it doesn't quite make sense.

Other than that, I think each line is very well thought out and goes together perfectly! Very nicely done.
divafica Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks! :)
I'm sorry for the late reply, being busy I won't have a chance to properly take advantage of your feedback.. but I will, I really appreciate it :D

By the way, 're' is not a typo, it means about.
minninnewah Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well then I just learned a new word, haha! My apologies.
insolitus85 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
SaphirePZ Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
very interesting...
theLUsir Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Good job!

Short and sweet...the very definition of most haikus!
divafica Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much! :aww:
theLUsir Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
MiauwMiauw Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012
haha this is great! :D
divafica Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks! :woohoo:
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