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Haikus are Too Short

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Literature Text

Haikus are too short,
To be at all worth clicking,
So I'll write some more.

These words are filler,
So I don't feel truly bad,
For writing briefly.

I write re Haikus
In a Haiku, how clever!
I'm showing off now.
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I think this is very well written. The way the haikus themselves are about haikus is ironic and clever. I never would of thought that someone could make a work truly tell about itself in such a way. I've read other work by you and honestly, you have a lot of promise. The only thing I would've changed in this poem is made it say rewrite instead of "re haikus". Other than that I love your work and hope that you will continue to write. If you don't you'll be depriving the World of greatness! Best of luck to you!